…I’m exhausted. Shut the door behind you…

                He walked in about ten. She was quiet, the homework all done, groceries purchased, the last of the laundry was tossing in the dryer. She had taxied their children to try-outs and practice, through the mall for tennis shoes, made dinner, done the dishes, mowed the neighbor’s lawn, laughed and cried with the kids and worked nine hours herself.

            Their eyes connected. She was on the couch, curled with book and pen, working on tomorrow’s study material. She looked cozy. He leaned over to give her an intimate squeeze, a deep, throaty kiss. She melted, momentarily, then her spine stiffened. “I’m exhausted. Shut the door behind you.”

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14 Responses to …I’m exhausted. Shut the door behind you…

  1. Miriam says:

    I think our heroines know each other 🙂

  2. Oh gosh I could relate to this. After a hard days work there is nothing left in a mother, and although in spirit she wants to accept her partners well meaning advances, she’s just too knackered to take it any further!

  3. Sally-Jayne says:

    I really enjoyed this. I could be reading too much into it, but there seems to be guilt and tension here, as if he’s late home because he stopped out for a few drinks with the lads, not because he’s been putting in the overtime.

    • lorrainefort says:

      I hope not…but your thoughts made me laugh! I think we just get overtired, try to do too much, and put the barriers where they will most readily be accepted, at home. 🙂

    • ventahl says:

      I second this! LOL. I know what we get up to under the guise of work as well as you. You know we’re not saints! But you can bet he’ll be doing the dishes, cleaning the house, playing with the kids and romantic as he can be on Saturday, just for a sniff of nookie!

  4. Alison Green says:

    Overworked, overtired, those we live with suffer most! An interesting piece.

  5. jfb57 says:

    There was so much promise in your scene but the characters were very distant & as Sally-Jayne says – so much tension. Excellent writing in which you created such a powerful cameo. Brilliant!

  6. Gilly Gee says:

    So often there is just no energy left is there? Real life very well captured!

  7. Sandra says:

    A scene that must be repeated many times in many relationships, beautifully portrayed.

  8. Mayumi says:

    I really like the quiet tension and exhaustion in this scene. There’s an element of romance, perhaps dimmed by children and work and other responsibilities, but it’s there.
    I’ll have to keep track of your blog from now on!

    • lorrainefort says:

      thank you for the kind comments, you seem to have connected with the ideas i was trying to convey. 🙂 It’s so hard to stay romantic, to see the man who courted me in the driven man he’s become…glad you like the writing!

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